Here are the debrief notes for the past week's bulletin :
Job Loss Story: Joeys opening line – repetition okay as long as its not too noticeable. Opposition – always going to give a good interview or “slam” opposition. Good shot, nice background view, well framed, noise issue with the water though. Should have asked more obvious questions to get more quotes.
The graphic quote was too weak. Good framing of the noddy’s, becareful on the eye line to make sure the noddy looks realistic and not fake. Make sure both interviews are of similar time so not to show bias.
Simulator/Trading story : Technically brilliant, slight editorial problem in the fact that its too positive, maybe in the sign off put some sort of spin on the article eg “it remains to be seen if the simulator will be a success….” Needed a stronger finish
Big Tidy Up – good shots again, balanced story, Joy Carter liked story because although it was negative it was truthful.
Fairtrade story – facts are in Kayleigh’s voice, exposition, would be better if it came from a real source, or a piece to camera would be stronger.
Sport – stumble over words in opening, relax and pretend you have more time. Re-shoot it. Strong piece to camera, not too bad footage , trying to emphasise the amount of people there, tighten the shot to give a more crowded effect. Try to get tighter to action, maybe cut aways to the crowd to get emotions on footage. Well read over the footage.
The and finally was not as strong and quick as hoped.
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